Original Chapter 4

As I mentioned in the comments and on my Facebook page, the original Volume 13: No One Can Escape Fate was supposed to have a different storyline. Specifically, I was going to introduce a new Original Character, a player from Yggdrasil, who was behind the beastmen invasion. However, this idea was shot down by my beta readers. The hate for OCs is real. And although I thought my OC was alright, as it wasn’t a self-insert, nor was it someone from AoG. And frankly, this player would have limited influence on the story. Nonetheless, the mere fact of introducing an OC would turn people off and lead some to drop the story entirely.

After considering it, I decided to change the story. I plan to write up to volume 18 in this fanfiction series, not to mention I want to write my own webserial too, so losing readers this early on would be bad. Besides, I’ll get plenty of OCs in Volume 17, so 🙂

Anyway, let me get to the point. Since I had already written one and a half parts of the original plot, and I felt it was a pretty good storyline (the whole OC hatred aside.) I am going to post it here for your enjoyment. Please leave me a comment with your thoughts on this storyline. Also, here’s the actual storyline and background I had come up with for the OC.

Without further ado, here’s the original Chapter 4, Part 1 and half of Chapter 4, Part 2:

Chapter 3, Part 4 had a slightly different ending:

Momon approached the heaving minotaur and kicked the axe away. Nabe approached as well.

“Then, I have some questions I wish to ask you,” Ainz said. “But, let’s move to a better location first,” he added.

He was elated, finally he had captured the ever-elusive minotaur. Soon he would get the answers he sought..

“Too naive” Norum grinned.

“What?” Ainz was startled, that wasn’t the expression a defeated enemy should make.

“What good are my answers to a dead man?” the minotaur broke into a mocking laughter.

Ainz didn’t have time to ponder these words. He saw the shadowy figure out of a corner of his eye. As soon as the minotaur started laughing, Ainz swung his sword.

“Nabe, duck!” Ainz bellowed as his weapon sped towards the one behind the maid.

Chapter 4, Part 1

Nabe ducked just in time and Momon’s blade flew above her head. However, it cut nothing but air.

“Hanzos, protect Nabe!” Ainz yelled, moving in front of her, a sword in each hand.

“Momon-sa-san..”Nabe began.

“Contact Shalltear, have her open [Gate] immediately,” Momon ordered, a note of anger in his voice.

If Nabe dies before messaging Shalltear, things would become really bad. Ainz’s mind raced. Nabe really is our weakness, if she dies we’ll have to use scrolls to [Message] Shalltear, but scrolls take time to activate. I can’t fight a level 100 player using [Perfect Warrior] and the Hanzos could only stall for time. Would we have enough time to use a [Message] scroll and order Shalltear to rescue us?

Momon and the Hanzos surrounded Nabe, while she frantically contacted Shalltear. However, no attack came in these crucial moments and Shalltear was successfully contacted.

A portal opened and the vampire stepped out of it, she was followed by a dozen powerful monsters. Now that the reinforcement had come, Momon was able to relax a little.

“Hanzos try to find someone using stealth, probably an assassin type,” Ainz ordered before grabbing the minotaur and dragging him towards the open portal.

“Are you alright, Momon-san?” Shalltear asked, staying in character and addressing him as Momon rather than Ainz.

“Yes, I am fine. Stay alert, if the Hanzos find anyone, we’ll capture them,” he replied. “Nabe, take this one with you,” he added.

“Yes, Momon-san,” Nabe replied before she grabbed the minotaur and stepped into the portal.

“How many enemies are we dealing with?” Shalltear asked as they observed their surroundings.

“At least one, but could be more,” Ainz replied.

They continued to stay alert, ready to engage at any moment. However, there was no enemy to fight. The Hanzos returned one after another, all reported the same thing: “They were unable to find anyone.”

“Then, we are going back,” Ainz ordered the retreat.

He stepped into the portal, followed by everyone else. After they left the portal closed, leaving behind the devastated camp where Momon and Norum had fought.

Inside the Nazarick Ainz silently cursed, his emotional suppression ability went off and he calmed down. The emotions he felt earlier wasn’t fear, undead couldn’t probably even feel fear. It was the anger you would feel when you got to the final stages of a video game, but then almost died due to a careless mistake.

“Ai-Momon-san, is everything OK?” Shalltear asked.

“Have I been toyed with all along?” Ainz wondered.

He grabbed the minotaur’s shoulders lifting him up and brought Norum’s face close to his own.

“Look you stupid cow, I need some answers and you are going to give them to me. One way or another,” Ainz promised.

Norum was shocked. He expected Momon to get attacked, but no attack came. Then there was the portal through which he was transported to this strange place. He never even heard of such magic. And these beings, all of them felt stronger than him, especially the little girl with silver hair. He was trying to regain his bearings and wasn’t paying attention to Momon who was shouting something.

“Who was that? Who was supposed to attack us?” Ainz demanded.

The minotaur remained silent with a confused look on his face. Ainz felt annoyance, though not enough to cause his emotions to be suppressed. He had spent so much time chasing this minotaur, but even now – that he got him — no answers came. Ainz punched the minotaur in a shoulder, eliciting a painful scream from Norum.

“Who was supposed to attack us?” He repeated the question.

“I don’t know,” the minotaur screamed, a hand over his shoulder.

Ainz’s shook his head, am I going to have to wait for Neuronist Painkill to make him talk before I get my answers. A flash of annoyance hit him again.

“No, I really don’t know, he never gave his name!” Norum wailed.

“Now we are getting somewhere. Who is this he?” Ainz asked.

“I don’t know, it happened three years ago. Some shadowy figure came to my tent while I slept. He said my brother and I were to unite the beastmen. If we didn’t comply, he would kill us,” Norum began his story, sitting on the floor surrounded by monsters.

“I didn’t comply and upped my security instead. However, a few days later the same thing happened. My guards didn’t even see anyone come in, and the ones keeping watch in my tent were all knocked out. He told me it was my last chance. If I wasn’t smart enough to know my place, he would find someone else,” the minotaur continued.

“What could I do? I began to unite the beastmen, and a week later my brother joined my efforts. Apparently, he had the same experience as I.”

“And after you united all the tribes he told you to attack the Draconic Kingdom?” Ainz asked.

“Yes. He would contact us via [Message] and tell us what to do,” Norum confirmed.

“Then he is the one who alerted you to our moves and why you were able to escape from us?” Ainz began to understand what had happened.

“Yes, he was the one who informed me of your movements.”

“Then why didn’t he do it this time?”

“He told me I must fight you. That’s why I thought he would attack you,” Norum replied with a defeated look.

“Guess he had other plans,” Ainz taunted the minotaur but got no response. “Did he give a reason for the halt of the invasion?”

“No. He just said we were waiting for powerful opponents.”

“What about Krozno, was he the one who gave you those potions? And the one to come up with the defense strategy?”

Norum nodded.

“Did he give a reason for doing so? By giving a Rage Potion to the beastmen he sentenced them to death.”

“He didn’t. When I objected I was told to do what he ordered or face consequences,” Norum’s dissatisfaction clearly came through in his voice.

Ainz caressed his chin while thinking. After a while, he waved his hand dismissively.

“Take him to the Frozen Prison,” he ordered.

After the minotaur was removed Ainz canceled [Perfect Warrior] turning into his normal magic caster appearance.

“Shalltear, call all of the guardians currently in Nazarick, including pandora’s Actor, I will hold a meeting in half an hour in the throne room. Also, raise Nazarick’s defenses to the maximum” he gave the order before he teleported away.

Ainz walked through a corridor towards his bedroom. His thoughts were a complete mess.

The Hanzos couldn’t find him, so it’s reasonable to assume he’s a max level player, or at least level 80 with a high specialization in stealth. How much did he learn about us during this time? It was a good thing I told the NPCs to address me as Momon in the open. Ainz thought.

Then what does he want? It’s obvious he only attacked the Draconic Kingdom to force a powerful opponent to reveal themselves. Then he had us fight battles of escalating difficulty. Culminating with Krozno, where he tested my strength specifically. After that, he had the minotaur face me directly, and then even alerted me to his presence… Does he want to be found? Ainz shook his head.

Ainz entered his bedroom, a maid and the usual Eight Edge Assassins were waiting for him.

“Leave me, there is something I need to do alone,” Ainz instructed.

He needed to focus and although he had gotten better at ignoring the watchful eyes of his servants, he did not want to control his behavior this time. After his servants left Ainz fell on his enormous bed and rolled around. He couldn’t feel the softness of the bed, though he could feel it was soft, and he didn’t need to rest. But, this rolling on a bed had become a ritual for him, it would help him relax and gather his thoughts. Laying on his back Ainz thought about the unknown figure.

I will finally meet another player in this world. But will he be a friend or a foe? An image of a certain ninja flashed in Ainz’s mind, it would be great if he really was Nishikienrai-san. Ah, I shouldn’t count on such luck. Let’s assume he’s a foe and is just trying to find the strongest opponent before he strikes.

Ainz’s shook his head, doesn’t really make sense. What good is it to him if he kills someone strong? He isn’t trying to take over the world, so there is no conflict between us.

No, no. That’s wishful thinking on my part. I need to prepare for the worst possible scenario. For a moment Suzuki Satoru thought of what would be the worst case scenario. There are multiple level 100 players, all of whom are proficient enough in stealth to go undetected by the Hanzos.

Or, that there is a group of players and they are using this stealther as a trap, he thought of another possibility. The chances of a battle should be low in either scenario, since there is no conflict between us. Still since I don’t know if I can revive, I should approach this situation with caution.

Reaching this decision Ainz rolled on the bed some more. He spent the rest of the time before his meeting with the guardians coming up with various strategies for his situation. Finally, it was time. He exited his bedroom and teleported to the 10th floor and was greeted by the gathered guardians and three of the Pleiades.

He motioned to the guards to follow him and entered the throne room. He took his seat on the throne, Albedo stood beside him while Shalltear, Cocytus, Aura, Demiurge and Pandora’s actor stood in front of him.

“During my capture of the minotaur God-kin in the Draconic Kingdom, we had encountered some being, whom I believe to be a Player,” Ainz began.

He felt the nervous excitement of the guardians. Albedo stood closest to him, so he felt her excitement especially strongly. Excitement and something more.. tension? There was no time to dwell on such things.

Ainz continued to explain what had happened in the Draconic Kingdom, as well as his deductions as to the goals of this unknown entity.

“Then, what shall we do, Ainz-sama?” Shalltear asked after his explanation.

“We don’t have anyone capable of locating such a stealthy opponent. Combined with this Player not looking for a fight, I believe we should try to approach them diplomatically,” Ainz shared his thought.

“Ainz-sama, you don’t mean you’ll go yourself?” Albedo’s wings opened and close as she questioned her master.

“Of course not,’ Ainz smiled. “I plan to use Pandora’s Actor, impersonating me,” he added.

“It’s an honor to serve you, Ainz-sama,” Pandora’s Actor spoke in an overly exaggerated manner.

No time for this, Suzuki reminded himself not to get distracted by Pandora’s Actors’ behavior.

“Can I go with Pandora’s Actor?” Albedo asked nonchalantly.

“I didn’t realize you were so eager to meet another player, Albedo. Are you hoping it’s one of the Supreme Beings?” Ainz asked.

“Yes,” Albedo smiled in response.

“Still, as a Guardian Overseer, you should not engage in a battle recklessly. Also, sending a large force would spook this player. That party should be as cautious of us as we are of them, after all,” Ainz waved his hand dismissively.

“Then, Ainz-sama, what do you want us to do?” Demiurge asked.

“Pandora’s Actor and two strong servants will teleport back to where we captured the minotaur. There Pandora’s Actor will try to make contact with this player. If he succeeds, we can decide what to do after he gains some information. Meanwhile, we will move to the third floor and will observe him via scrying magic If there is a fight, Shalltear, Cocyutus, Demiurge as well as all of the other strong servants which were given to Shalltear will join the battle and capture the enemies,” Ainz explained.

All of the guardians bowed in acknowledgment.

“Also, Aura, give Pandora’s Actor the Depiction of Nature and Society,” Ainz instructed.

“What? Why me?” Aura complained.

“Cocytus and Shalltear are needed for firepower, while Demiurge’s [Dimensional Lock] is also necessary. Given the situation, anyone who goes out there must have a World Item,” Ainz told her.

After Aura reluctantly gave her World Item to the Greater Doppelganger, Ainz spoke again.

“I would also like to speak with Pandora’s Actor alone.”

All of the guardians left the throne room, leaving Ainz alone with his creation.

“This is a tricky situation. Normally I would want to be the one to speak to a Player. However, the situation is too dangerous,” Ainz began.

“I understand, father,” Pandora’s Actor replied.

“Therefore your main goal is to not antagonize this Player. I would like to avoid a fight if possible. Be diplomatic and try to gain some information. [Message] me with any details you learn. If I can determine that a fight is unlikely, I’ll teleport to you and speak with this Player myself,” Ainz continued.

“I understand. I will carry out your orders to the utmost of my abilities,” Pandora’s Actor saluted.

Ainz shook his head, even though I told him to stop with the saluting, he still does it from time to time. Overcoming their programmed behavior is really difficult for the NPCs. I wonder how Mare is doing in this regard.

Ainz and his creation left the throne room and teleported to the third floor, joining the other guardians and powerful servants from Albedo’s Player Search Squad.

“Then, we shall depart,” Pandora’s Actor announced after transforming into Ainz.

This really is a strange experience, Ainz thought while staring at the undead mage. It’s like staring into a mirror.

“Stay safe. If a fight breaks out, just stall for time until reinforcements arrive,” Ainz gave this last tip.

Pandora’s Actor activated a teleport and stepped through it. Two undead level 80 monsters followed him, disappearing into the swirling black abyss.

Ainz cast a scrying spell and a magical screen appeared, hanging in the air. The guardians gathered in front of it, watching Pandora’s Actor’s actions.

After he stepped through the portal Pandora’s Actor looked around. There were no signs of any enemies.

“Stay here,” he ordered the two undead who came out of the portal. After giving this order, he walked forward some fifty meters. He judged this distances to be adequate and stopped. Glancing around he could still see no signs of anyone else.

“Do you want to speak? Then come out!” He called out.

Nothing happened. Pandora’s Actor felt disappointed, he knew how much his master wanted to speak with this Player. He continued to look around for any signs. Finally, nearly half a minute later a lone figure showed up from the thin air.

Standing some ten meters away, he was about 1.9 meters tall, wearing what looked like a leather armor, over which he wore an undone robe. The robe seemed to be shifting in and out of existence, giving the figure an otherworldly feel. The face of this person was covered by a hood.

“Who are you?” Pandora’s Actor asked after they stared at each other silently for a few seconds.

“You first,” the figure replied in a deep, and somehow barking voice.

“I am Ainz Ooal Gown,” Pandora announced. Ainz had told him to skip the Sorcerer King, and directly use the name.

“Ainz Ooal Gown, eh?” The figure questioned. “Ainz Ooal Gown, a skeletal mage… Momonga-san, is that you?”

“What? How do you know that name? Who are you?” Pandora’s Actor asked hastily.

Could it be? Had another Supreme Being come to this world? He wondered. As his master’s creation, he could feel Ainz’s loneliness.

“Imagine that, of all the players out there to run into you,” the figure laughed while removing his hood.

With the hood off, Pandora’s Actor could finally see the figure’s face – a wolf-man with gray fur.

“I am Fate.”

Chapter 4 Part 2

When the figure asked if he was Momonga, everyone’s emotions spiked. For a moment Ainz was certain it was one of his comrades. Who else would be so familiar with Ainz Ooal Gown’s roster as to guess his name simply based on his race and class? But that only made his disappointment bigger when the wolf-man revealed himself and gave his name. He could feel the other guardians’ disappointment too. Disappointment and tension – any player who was not one of the Supreme being was a threat to Ainz and Nazarick.

“Fate-dono, huh? Imagine running into him in this world,” Ainz murmured.

“You know him, Ainz-sama?” Demiurge asked.

“We’ve met,” Ainz laughed, “Hmm, he haven’t attacked Pandora’s Actor, I’ll meet with him,” he decided.

“You can’t! It’s too dangerous!” Albedo reacted immediately.

“Umu, I am familiar with him, he has a certain… code of honor. Since he hadn’t attacked yet, I don’t think he will,” Ainz tried to reassure Albedo. “And even if he did, I wouldn’t make it so easy on him,” he continued after his reasoning failed to sway the Guardian Overseer’s mind.

Albedo tried to protest, but Ainz waves his hand. He focused on his connection to the undead summons he had created. While he could only vaguely feel a connection to the ones far away, those nearby could be ordered quite easily. Ainz commanded six closest Death Knights to come to him. After that he cast [Message] and spoke to his creation.

“Fate-san shouldn’t attack, so I am going to come and speak with him. Keep the conversation going until I arrive,” Ainz instructed Pandora’s Actor.

“Cocytus, Shalltear and Aura will come with me,” Ainz addressed the guardians who were waiting for his orders. “You will stay back while I talk to him. Should he attack, Aura will use her [Hunter’s Mark] and you will capture him,” Ainz continued.

“Will the three of us be enough?” Shalltear asked cautiously. She did not want to make another blunder after her mind control fiasco.

“Yes, Fate-dono is an assassin, he can’t fight in the open,” Ainz assured her.

Ainz waved his hands to dismiss other questions, and focused his attention on the magical screen again, listening to Pandora’s Actor’s conversation.

“Is it just you? Or are there other players?” The doppelganger asked.

“You are the first one I found. How about you? And it looks like you were transported with your guild,” Fate asked curiously.

“Just me, and yes,” Pandora replied.

“Curious, I wonder what determines who gets transported,” the wolf-man scratched his ear.

“Fate-dono, why did you use this invasion to force powerful beings to reveal themselves? Why didn’t you just gather information normally? ”

“I did gather it normally. I searched the beastmen and troll nations but didn’t find any other players. So I found the two awakened God-kin minotaurs in the beastmen nation, and had them unite the tribes while I searched the Great Minotaur Kingdom,” Fate shrugged. “Since I couldn’t show myself in the human nations, I chose to invade this human nation and just wait and see who would come,” he continued.

“Could you sneak in and gather information that way?”

“Sneak in where? Sure I could sneak up on the nation’s ruler and ask about powerful beings. But could you guarantee that word of my existence wouldn’t get out? Not to mention, what if the other players were like me, and haven’t revealed their existence? Then, I would be the one at a disadvantage.”

“You are a cautious one,” Pandora’s Actor remarked.

“Huh, that’s coming from you? I am surprised you didn’t bring your usual Death Knight spiral with you. Or could it be…” Fate didn’t have time to finish.

Several new beings stepped out of the opened [Gate]. Among them was a skeletal mage in luxurious robe. Following the mage were six Death Knights arranged in such a way that only a single one could be hit by any of the area of attack skills or abilities.

“Ah, there it is,” Fate said while looking at the Death Knight’s position. “Then, this one is an illusion? Or a doppelganger?”

After Ainz approached, Pandora’s Actor moved back to stand near portal.

“Fate-dono, what a surprise. I hope you are not mad about that incident,” Ainz greeted the player.

“That was back in the game, now we are in a New World, there is no need to mention it, Momonga-dono” Fate replied.

4 Comments on “Original Chapter 4

  1. This got my heart racing at the beginning but I too would absolutely hate having another OC. The main reason I like this anime is cuz Ainz has no equal (other than his own guardians) and for once we have a somewhat evil character (unlike all the animes out there for which MCs would risk their lives to protect an unknown person). Ainz is evil in the sense that he would easily kill thousands of outsiders rather than a single one of Nazarick’s inhabitants. But at the same time he’s also “good” because he was willing to risk his own life to fight Shalltear instead of just having others gang up on her. His reasoning for that was “The last thing I was is for our children to be killing each other”.

    I don’t know why Overlord is so good but one of the things that I like about Overlord is complete loyalty and no competition. The entire Overlord series is meant to be completely one-sided. Again, I’m just assuming from what I’ve seen so far. All in all, I’m glad you didn’t go with this story line.

    It says there are going to be many OCs in volume 17 and I’m glad that you’ve kinda thought that far ahead. This is just my opinion as a reader: I personally don’t really care if other guild members of Ainz Ooal Gown ever come or not but I definitely don’t want anyone to even be a threat to Nazarick. Like I don’t know what it is about Overlord but I just like the fact at how unfair this is. Regardless, whatever you do by the time volume 17 comes out, I’m sure people will still read it (Assuming this quality of writing continues). I don’t want to discourage you by any means to post whatever you want. Maybe I might end up liking it more than I expected. Anyways, I just wanted to give you my own two cents on the matter for what it’s worth.

    So far, I really like where this is going and as an author, you have great ideas. Like the plan to “kill” Ainz for 2.5 years and Demiurge for 2 years to get rid of threats (IDK what your main plan is so I’m just assuming it was to get rid of the Theocracy) was absolutely brilliant. And then once again you made another plan to kidnap Mare. This really gives me the Overlord vibes as if I’m reading the LN. Like there are multiple things going on behind the scenes – Just like how Ainz become an adventurer and sent Sebas and Solution on a separate mission. On top of that, you also use things that had already been introduced (like that orb).

    All in all, you’re a great author! I really wish I can see a lot more of your work. So please keep writing!!

    P.S
    I can tell the beta readers didn’t bother correcting this one XD

    • Thanks for the excellent feedback. Yes, one of Overlord’s charms is that Nazarick has no opposition. Which of course makes Ainz’s paranoid self more fun to read. Overlord is an awesome story, unfortunately, everything that has a beginning has an end.
      Volume 17 and more so Volume 18 are sort of “conclusion” volumes. Although you could easily end the story on volume 16.
      Still, I want more practice and ending things on volume 16 felt a but unfulfilling.

  2. Personally I think that your decision to not put in any OC this early into a story what’s a good idea between them in slowly and gradually over the Arcane storyline while having foreshadowing towards the possibility that there will be in the later finds would be a far better idea then this and it won’t turn people off as much a if there wasn’t just a sudden player out of nowhere.
    since finding another player would change up a lot of how they do things not to mention that ainz is not a trusting person if he found another player one of his first reactions would be to either kill the player just to see what would happen or be tortured and experiment on the player because Ainz is a very cautious person, and if there was another player there’s a high chance of everything he worked towards with the Guardians will go up In Smoke. While I’m not saying that all the Guardians would have a problem with it some of them would find it hard to believe they were made by humans also the most important thing about your OC is how you introduce to me I don’t watch/read Overlord for the fighting I do it mostly for the characters and seeing how the story will turn out if most feel wanted and Op character then all the other stories with said characters would have lasted been are first choice that being said I am enjoying the story so far ( however the parts was the dark elf use works mostly because I don’t see mirror as a shy person he would kill someone by being there stolen and when show a hint of remorse but that’sjust me) the end of the day people come to Overlord for different thinks Overlord is an open book with many different ways of interpreting what goes on in it and the character I am enjoying the stories even with its flaws but overall it’s a great story and I looked forward to seeing how things turn out best of luck to you and I hope you take the opinions of your fans to Heart

  3. this was really well done for an OC. pretty much every OC i’ve read sounds unbelievable and threatening to nazarick and i like when they have no competition

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